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Excellent story,although you do see a lot of arbok vore,this one was very unique.great visualization I feel if I was there watching, interesting plot as well. But what I liked the most was the way you accentuate their flavor, with the dried sweat idea. You kept the story going with no boring part to it, sometimes I went back to read certain parts. The way you were able to keep me wanting to read more of this even after the end is the best. overall i give this masterpiece a 4.5 out of 5 stars. keep up the excellent work Il be reading!
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SympathyBMW Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. Thank you for this critique. If you like this one, read the preview of my book. You'll love it.
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XxBlazingFirexX Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh I'd love to il start reading!
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SympathyBMW Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Who's stopping you? Not me. :)
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XxBlazingFirexX Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No on stopping me lol iv been reading
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SympathyBMW Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Heh. Don't forget to comment or critique on any one you want.
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XxBlazingFirexX Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Kk
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