Blind mans bluff."Kaysen" I heard Brett speaking softly in my ear, "Wake up. Its morning" I stirred and opened my eyes to see my best friend/meal in the world. He must like being human, because he always looked like his human self: long dirty blond hair, with gold streaks. He looked really handsome, but I like his true form better.
Excellent story,although you do see a lot of arbok vore,this one was very unique.great visualization I feel if I was there watching, interesting plot as well. But what I liked the most was the way you accentuate their flavor, with the dried sweat idea. You kept the story going with no boring part to it, sometimes I went back to read certain parts. The way you were able to keep me wanting to read more of this even after the end is the best. overall i give this masterpiece a 4.5 out of 5 stars. keep up the excellent work Il be reading!
Wow. Thank you for this critique. If you like this one, read the preview of my book. You'll love it.